Image P1000915

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Quite the composition here Bulent… The dramatic scale, the harsh and chilly desolation of the scene with the two puny figures moving in opposite direction, and the naked tree, potentially the organic counterpoint to the block of concrete but itself spiky and unwelcoming... Even the title directs the viewer to the idea of the shot as a picture frame from a science fiction movie set in some distant and desolate off world colony. This is an attention grabber Bulent, very interesting and strange! The one flaw (to my eyes) is the tilt in the building (on both sides, but more discordantly, right of frame). But if this detail isn’t deliberate, it can easily be fixed.

 

Cheers, Carlos.

I agree with CH, and add that I'd have cropped a bit on the left just to eliminate the sky portion on the building left side. have you tried a b/w with this one? Thank you for sharing, ciao, Giuseppe

Thank you very much for commenting on this photo.

I am really pleased by your visit and your comments. Your comments also made me feel better as I had anticipated the two problems you mentioned. My decision to leave the tilt "as is" was based on reading an advice from Mike Johnston on "over-correcting" the perspective distorsions. I still think he has a valid point but the tilt here is probably too much to be left alone. (I may consider leaving it slightly less corrected if I print this one). I have left the bit of sky Giuseppe mentions there to give a clue about the size and the shape of the building. However, its removal does not diminish the effect I intended.

I attach the revised image here for others to compare. I may replace the original at a later time.

Thanks again for your suggestions.

Bulent

in the intro to ‘Diane Arbus: An Aperture Monograph’ Diane writes - I don’t have the exact quote and the book is not near - something to the effect that the first thing the eye sees in a picture is the FLAW… - what is wrong in it is the thing first noticed! Or better, what is not quite right is what stands out. It's a curious phenomenon she observed and stating it she was on to something absolutely true. Whenever possibly the ‘flaw’ should be camouflaged in part because the viewer has little time to look at a photograph and if the first moment is contaminated whatever merit the picture may have is subsequently tainted, .

 

 

Good work in the revision Bulent. As it should be.

 

Really good work, congratulations!

Regards, Nebojsa.

 

Bulent: It is a great image.

 

On the contrarian side, I like the original's tilt, as it focuses on the interplay between the tree and the building as they lean into one another and give heft to the surreal atmosphere of the image. (Usually, I'm a real nit-picker for straight lines.) There's a balance and tension in the pairing that gets truncated with the proper lines. I do agree with losing that sliver of left sky.

 

Whatever you do, though, it is a great image.

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Hi Bulent,

 

I'm going to side with Patricia on this one. I like the unconventional-ness of that little piece of compositional tug on the frame which demands a second look and further evaluation on a composition that is exceedingly good. I adore the image regardless of choice. [favorited]

Thank you all for your valuable & rewarding comments on this photo.

I am really happy that this one has been appreciated by competent photographers like you.

This photo is among the few I am going to print big (taking into account all the advices, for sure).

Bulent, it's indeed easy to see what attracted you to shoot this but I'm on Giuseppe's side with this one. For a sense of scale, which is important here, you don't need that sky. In fact I find it rather distracting. In my opinion this would benefit from a minimal composition also a reason why I would suggest a b&w conversion as well. In other words, I myself would get rid of the distracting elements to emphasize the important ones and for me a square crop would do the trick. The compositional tension you created by those two figures walking out of the frame works really good.

I think monsieur Mestrom points the way the right way. His maybe the most balanced view of a most interesting photograph. Carlos

Thank you both for your comments on this photo and your contributions to this thread.

I am really pleased to read your thoughts on how to approach a photo in general and this one in particular.

I feel lucky to have so many well informed photographers describing their preferred, individual approaches and I draw my conclusions (mostly subconsciously) from these...

I will be putting all the final versions of my better photos to a personal gallery site within this month. This one will be there and I am still working on it :)

Many thanks again to all of you...

Well.  An other idea.   But  I like the  original as well.  I like  the  building with  the  blue sky.  The  perspective  distortion  do not  bother me.  I avoided  to  cut the  tree top.