Jaime

Jamie is a stunning beauty. Your B&W processing is great in the forefront but the lighting on on the right is just a bit too much, washing out the details . I question the positioning of the hands. They appear awkward to me, as though she's trying to give herself a chiropractic adjustment. If I had access to this lovely girl, I'd try again with a different hand pose and corrected lighting.

Cheers ~

Alberta

Photography/lighting aspects are solid. Subject needs some work - beautiful..but....

I don't like the hands (major) - and there's some wardrobe malfunction to be cleaned up in post (strap on her right shoulder, strap on her left chest) (minor).

But for those items, this would be excellent!

Garrick,

Jaime is a very pretty girl. You have focused well on her eyes and her skin tone is good. Her left hand shouldn't be lighter than her face, though. You don't want to draw the viewer's attention away from her face. And yes, the positioning of her hands is silly looking.

I have to disagree with Michael S. that showing her bra strap, especially two, is minor. It is quite tacky.

The composition is not bad. Cropping into her hair implies a tighter crop on the bottom, so I would give her more headroom or crop the bottom to have better top and bottom compositional balance. You could crop a tad off the right side to get even better left and right compositional balance. Try placing the tip of her nose in the vertical center of the photograph.

Be careful of your depth of field. There are parts of her that are out of focus.  I don't see a good reason to have any of her out of focus. An out of focus background is very nice and focuses attention on your subject. Parts of your subject out of focus will draw attention away from what is in focus. It is difficult to go wrong with having the entire subject in focus.

The lighting is a little flat. From the nice catchlights it appears she should have butterfly (Hollywood) lighting, but I don't see much of a shadow under her nose? She does have a broad highlight on the side of her face, but that looks like it is just spill from a side hair light. At least I hope you were not trying to light the side of her face and just got the rear portion of it.

The portrait has some flaws, but nothing that is not easily corrected. You are lucky to be able to work with such a beautiful girl.

Nice shot,

Mark

Thank you to all, Ill take all your messages to heart, and will try to put them into my next shoot. I have still so much to learn in the studio space, only just learned whats Butterfly lighting.

All your words have already taught me so much, and for this, I am extremly gratefull.

thank you.

gmWheeler