More modern architecture (Princeton University)

Discussion in 'Seeking Critique' started by jc1305us, Mar 10, 2021.

  1. EF9C7504-14A9-4C22-BC3F-13A69A042B1C.jpeg The school of public and international relations, Princeton University. Designed, believe it or not, by Minoru Yamasaki, who designed the World Trade Center complex. Shot on a Rolleiflex 2.8f, Kodak Tri-X 400.
     
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  2. I'm afraid there's no real "hook" in this one for me. It's a very adequate image for documentary purposes (and I should know: I shoot a lot of these), but I feel it lacks any unique, artistic character. I'm sorry I can't be more encouraging...
     
  3. Why in the world would anyone doubt that this was by Yamasaki?
    It's OK as a picture though.
     
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  4. As it is presented, your print lacks kick due to your very dark printing. Cast concrete, marble and glass have "spunk" when they are photographed, even with the dull, semi overcast day you did the shoot. There is a faint hint of blue with the mixed clouds in the upper left portion of the negative. Using either a G or 25A filter, with proper filter factors applied, would give you a better separation of values in that portion. The G filter would also perk up the separation of the concrete, marble & glass.
    I would suggest that you inquire into a better control of negative values in your exposing and developing. I use a version of the Zone System, even in roll film, and an application of this, or another system, would prevent the deep, non textural, dark areas of a wall, and some of the building shadow. Architectural Photography really is about showing what some person has endowed the structure with.
    In the many years I did my professional work, I always presented my work with cleaned up negative areas. I used either all white borders, or thin black borders. 1643889_3e5a94512d964ae86b54f2f57dfc40cf ce s5 bm.jpeg
    I have taken the liberty of reworking your negative. The size has been dropped to 1k pixel, so a bit of "mush" might appear.
    Keep the faith ! Your camera is supper good ! Consider using a medium or low asa film and hold your tripod (you do have one ?) close to your heart.
    Aloha, Bill
     
  5. Thank you Bill! That’s why I come here, to get excellent critique and pointers from guys like you. Looks great!
     

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