mark_heseltine1

Nice shot, but I wonder whether the shutter could have been closed down more to blur nose and ears, leaving the eyes the focal point? A sharper lens might have produced an even more striking shot. Good shot anyway.

 

Mark

... why is she not holding the violin correctly? The fingering is wrong and the bow is never held that way (it is not a pool cue! And the angle of the bow is wrong.

 

Also, the bow hair looks too tight.

 

But, I'd still marry her.

 

Actually, I love the smoke. Her right breast could have been better concealed as it is a distraction. The focus ought to be on her backside (as shown), the bridge and the face. The smoke should be wafting against her pelvis rather than out from it, as it looks like it is shooting out.

 

Great shot otherwise.

 

Mark

Hello Ron,

 

Hope you were not upset with my comments. Please continue your art. You are very talented. I look forward to seeing more of your photography. I have learnt a lot by simply studying this one photograph.

 

Kind regards

 

Mark

 

Ron,

 

I don't see the point of the model. By itself, the hallway is brilliant. The girl adds nothing but distraction to the surroundings and vice versa. Why this model? Why nude? Why the cigarette? Why the 'Jessica Rabbit' / 'pulp fiction' haircut? What is her predicament? She is no Mona Lisa with an enigmatic look. She is just a seductive euphemism for lung cancer, alternatively, every boy's dream.

 

Likewise, the room yells out for explanation. It exudes a history. Is it death, torture and remorse of someone so close to, yet so far from, freedom? Or, is it children out of class for a brief few moments of freedom and unobserved adventure?

 

Either the model is too strong for the room or the room is too strong for the model. They do not mix.

 

Taken by themselves, the objects of the girl and the hallway are brilliant.

 

Mark Heseltine

 

 

Very nice colour balance. I would have removed the top black bar and added just a tad more of the bottom step (the bottom corner and a few inches on) to balance proportion between a clean top and bottom which currently is a bit rough. And perhaps raising the camera up a few inches too. However, great shot.