jonathan_proulx

very dreamy/nostalgic

 

the perspective on the feet in isolation makes it seem almost as if I am that child looking down at my feet. The blur contibutes asense of motion.

 

I have a very strong feeling of this photo, I can almost feel the tire beneath my feet as I lean back and swing upward.

 

Well done.

While agreeing somewhat with the critiques above, I don't think any are fatal.

 

The tree cutting the path bothers me not at all. though it might be improved by aligning the trunk with the top-left to bottom right diagonal of the center stair segment.

 

The excessively bright top left is probably the most distracting feature for me, but looks like it could easily be burned in (for me this is much easier in wet process).

 

This leaves the somewhat less interesting right quarter. I could easily live with it as is, but I would crop the right side to the point of making the image square and see how that looks.

 

I'd say this is a sucessful image, though one that perhaps has even greater potential

the composition suggests to me that she is exhausted from working on some film project, but the model seems too peaceful and dreamy to have just collapsed from an artistic frenzy.

 

She is pretty an nicely lit, but I'm a bit confused about the narrative of the image

compelling colors an dinteresting, unsettling angles. I really wonder wat the chairs are facing and why there are streaks on the door.

 

good job

Seems like Michael giving Lucifer the finger :)

 

I like the choice of colors and their placement. I can only imagine the loss of texture between the print and the few pixels shown here, thankfully I've done some gums so I can, though I've had less luck digitizing them.

I like the arrangement of the grasses and the balance of grass to stone. The lichen seems like a moon rise over the mountain created by the grasses.

 

The seperation between the grass and the rock is a bit weak, I wish the rock were darker...

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I wonder if my monitor is way off. I'm working off my laptop wich is very far from a calibrated display.

 

As I'm looking at it there's quite a bit of detail in the hands, I can see wrinkles in the hand and knuckles up to where the clay's thickness obscures them. Theres some spectacular (as opposed to diffuse I make no value judgement here :) reflections across the wet clay between the first and seconed knuckes and detail gets lost on the second and third knuckles as the hand curls away from the camera (the print maintains a bit of detail here but I lost it in the scan).

 

I'll have to get this on a better monitor tomorrow and see what damage I've done...

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I know this isn't up for critique (yet?), but I was browsing your portfolio and this is quite my favorite...

 

excellent shot. I like the distance of the town, gives a very "small town" feel. The focus on th echurch dead center and bright white also sugests the "peaceful country life" pastoral ideal.

 

Viewed from a spiritual stand point the steple is bridging heaven and earth quite nicely reaching to the clouds (as it does by design) and reaching down into the water in it's reflection.

 

Unfortunately it's centered with almost perfect four way symmetry and thus will drive the rule of thirds fanatics to distraction, but I think it's this centeredness that make this image.

Why can't things be centered sometimes? I like the framing over all. Visually it isn't exaclty centered. The shore line is a much stronger horizontal than the actual horizon, to me.

 

Perhaps this piece is investigating the theorem of sixths? The bottom half of the image at least is split into three zones: the sand in the forground, the table, and the water...The upper half also has three zones though not as evenly spaced or balanced as those in the lower portion: the pale stripe just above the horizon, the cloud band, and the darker region above that.

 

Do people really find this objectionable?

 

BTW I've decided I'd prefer a slightly lower angl on the shot so the far edge of the table aligns with the shore line (I'm sure you've been waiting for my pronouncement on that :)

 

-Jon

your wish is my command...or at least a good idea in this case. I like it square

Nice shot. Hopefully you didn't read my prior comment before I fixed my display :)

 

Lovely lighting.

excellent capture, I wish I could see the face of the person to his left (our right) would have made a noce line with the three faces, but we can't always get what we want.

 

Well done.

Nice sense of space, I feel as though I want to walk in and sit down, but the relation of the table top to the water line troubles me I want it either even or with more seperation.

way too big to see, except the supersmall thubnail. From what I can tell the leaves are a plus they add some color to the scene

the top third or so is washed out, perhaps a shorter exposure

Nice subject and composition. The color treetment isn't to my tast, think it could use less contrast and possibly a bit more saturation. I also find the edge treetment distracting.

I'd like to see more detail on the inside of the bridge.

Initially I printed this tall to mirror the water bottle, but now I'm

thinking I should crop the top tight to the highest light...

nice shot. The rough stained concrete seems to evoke more of a prison or urban slum than a spring in Oregon.

 

I like the way the light catches the water but the wall the tap is in is more shaded, makes for nice contrast.

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This is a scan of an 8x10 print (actually the first working print with no burning or dodging). On paper you can see alot of texture in the hand, couldn't get it in digital, even in the 300dpi tiff it's a bit muddy, oh well.

 

Next step is to see if it will go to 16"x20", with the fine grain of the film and the sharp detail you can't see :) I'm optimistic.

I disagree with the cropping comments. I like the space provided by the generous margins.

I've seen digital creations on PN that I couldn't call photos, but this isn't one of them. Photoshop may make this easier and certainly more accessable but stranger and more surreal compositions have been made in the darkroom, are they not photos?