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my first crit here so I hope you will forgive me for not knowing the expected form or protocol.

All of the technical stuff is done well, nice sharpness, nice framing, nice placement against the sky, etc. It does look to me like an ad for something but without the center of interest. His face is dark and his eye sockets even darker so my eye constantly wants to wander away to a lighter spot.

Lew

This one probably belongs in the Portrait  section. Good Job !

Welcome to the critique forum, Lewis.

I think your criticisms are valid, and I've posted another version of the picture where I lightened the subject's face and made a few other changes too.