keira grant keira-9216-2

Wel in a nutshell you have blown out a lot of highlights.  And on the shadow half, the right side the shadows and colors of the shadows are conflicting.  Since it is not full high key the lack of contrast works against the whole image.  On a more minor not the models skin needs some touching up: particularly the moles on her chest, as well as her chin area.  Nice start, but only a start imo

Best regards

PDE