timothymuffitt 1 Posted June 4, 2013 Dear Avital,Love this!! Beautifully conceived and executed. Bravo!Tim Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 4, 2013 Timothy, thank you so much ! Glad you like it:) Link to comment
JatinderKeith 0 Posted June 4, 2013 Avital. It is telling a story without showing much. Please consider a tighter crop and provoke the imagination of the viewer as what she is looking at. Link to comment
pnital 36 Posted June 4, 2013 I'm back, and you can send me what we have decided about before I left. I think this is very well composed,telling a story with minimal details. I do agree with the previous comment about cropping a bit from the RHS, (changing it to a square). It will enhance the story.If you wish you can find my home phone number ( 144...)and ask me what ever you want. Link to comment
timothymuffitt 1 Posted June 4, 2013 I like the space to the right and would not suggest cropping this at all. For me, this works beautifully as it stands.Tim Link to comment
AlainD 0 Posted June 4, 2013 A very emotional image that tells a universal story. Great gestion of DOF and very nicely composed. Well worth a 6!Best regards,Alain Link to comment
ruudalbers 1 Posted June 4, 2013 A very nicely composed beautiful and emotional result, Avital! Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 4, 2013 Pnina- I hope you had a great trip! Thanks so much, I will email you later this evening :)Jatinder and Pnina- I see what you mean and I have tried it with a tighter crop, but I like it less like that. I feel the door adds something to the scene, it gives a sense of the space they are sitting in. It may work better on some level with the crop you suggested, but for me it just seems more complete like it is. Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 4, 2013 Of course your opinion is worth a lot to me! I'm glad you think so. It's very nice to have someone else tell me so and not just have my feeling about it. Sometimes one needs an objective outlook on something one takes himself. I don't always have the confidence in what I think about an image I take regarding cropping or other things, So I really like getting different perspectives and thoughts and then deciding myself, so thanks for that. Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 4, 2013 Alain and Rudd - Thank you so much! your comments mean so much to me and thank you very much for the high rating! Link to comment
joscelyn_sylvester 0 Posted June 5, 2013 I have just gone through all of your images and I find that this one is the strongest and most appealing. i can draw some drama and emotion from this one. In fact I feel some tension. Link to comment
Guest Guest Posted June 5, 2013 Lovely and suggestive work. Cropping would take away the space needed for wonder. To suggest a crop is to suggest making it more simple and clear and that's not what it's supposed to be. It is obviously meant to be inquisitive and open-ended. Beware of most crop suggestions. Generally (and, of course, there are exceptions) they tend to take mood and mystery out of the equation in a quest for ease of digestion and simplicity of subject . . . often a very bad idea. Link to comment
lynnemass 10 Posted June 6, 2013 I think the person who suggested the crop, meant for it to be on the left side. The man's ear and left shoulder really don't add much necessary information. What do you think?-Lynne Link to comment
Guest Guest Posted June 6, 2013 A very good idea. Brava! Pnina did mention cropping from the RHS so we know that's what she meant, as she also proposed a square prop. I do have a feeling Jatinder also meant from the RHS but, regardless, I took a look at it with your suggested crop of the ear and shoulder and this, to me, added to the mood already established. Link to comment
trisha jean-angela 5 Posted June 6, 2013 Very good capture! I like the crop just as it is - including the man's ear because it gives us more of a picture of who she is looking at from across the table. I think your instincts were right on how you composed this image - you have good instincts and a good eye; your images tell stories with feeling which is why they are so appealing. Very well done. Thank you for sharing. :) Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 6, 2013 Joscelyn, thank you for viewing my portfolio and I'm glad you liked this shot. I agree, I also feel a lot of tension here and this is why I named it "the end'. Like many moments captured in a mere photograph, a moment later they were all happy and chatty and there was no memory of the saddness and tension from before. Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 6, 2013 Tony- Thank you so much. Fred, I suppose it's a very individual thing and a matter of taste, I think in this photo it can work either way, but I do prefer it much more like it is -nice to see others do too. Lynn , thanks for your suggestions. I can see what you mean and I tried viewing it with the crop you suggested and think it def can work. I didn't even consider that before so thanks for pointing this out. I'm not sure what I like better (with ear or without) Trisha, thanks for the kind words. I'm very glad you like the image as it is, and that you liked my other photos as well. Link to comment
rlopezmoral 1 Posted June 6, 2013 Wonderfully captured and wonderfully titled !! An image with a story behind ... lovely done !! Kind regards ... Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 6, 2013 Ricardo, thank you very much I really appriciate your comment and very glad you like it Link to comment
sideris 0 Posted June 7, 2013 This is a way to tell a story that I love indeed. Here you've created an atmosphere with a smell of anguish with the collaboration of the title (very aproppriated, pointing something that isn't obvious at first sight) and the BW rendering.The selective focus, the language of her gaze, her head resting on her fist, and the dark background texture are subtle clues leading us to "The End".Just one question remains in the mind of the observer, ¿who is being abandoned?¿He?¿She? ...mistery still, like in every good story.Nice work you done, I like to much this photograph. Link to comment
avitalmontaguslonim 0 Posted June 7, 2013 Dear Carlos, Thank you so much for your nice comment. it's such a great complement coming from you- as I told you before I really love your work! I appriciate it and so glad you liked it Link to comment
Funtak 0 Posted June 17, 2013 ..No more love in her eyes, I think. Very good capture. Well composed, I see no need for cropping, it would disturb a balance of the image. I like your portrait on a front page better though. Best regards, vf Link to comment
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