tom_hogner

I think you need to consider sitting one of the lights at a lower angle to avoid or minimize the shadow on her lower jaw, it is a bit too pronounced.  Also her right hand is is a bit distracting... if I were going to have her arms crossed I think I would have tried to avoid her thumb sticking up and fingers on the right hand being spread, it give the hand a larger appearance than it should have... but considering her hand is also lighter than her arm I think I would have kept it out of shot completely it almost makes me think she is wearing a glove...lastly I'm not sure what you wanted the viewer to zoom in on.  If its her face, then I would have dropped the shiny bracelets, they are distracting, then again that white tipped thumbnail is also distracting especially when almost on top of the black top.... I think I would have tried it with non jewelry at all to minimize the clutter.

Maybe its just me... but that pose seems to make her butt look even bigger than it is.  I might have her turn more so that it doesn't appear so big... also the amount of bend in her back almost makes it look like she has a back problem (more so in the shot of her standing up where my first thought was poor girl she needs back surgery).

Otherwise if you could have gotten the sun directly centered behind her head it would have been nicer.

Also you might have gotten a larger lens and stood back further so that her right hand wouldn't look quite so big in relation to her.

I will say nice color... my main issue would be with the pose not hiding her backside enough and looking a bit over posed.