keith_burton

March 21, 2004

The bread came out beautifully, but the background is far too distracting. Between the intersecting lines forming crosshairs, the dark spot and the drawer pull the background draws my eye much more strongly than the subject.

I recommend a tight crop, just below the near-horizontal line between the drawers. If you don't object to minor digital manipulation, then also cloning out the remaining vertical line and dark spot would, in my opinion, make this an outstanding shot.

January 29, 2004

I like this. I think I'd prefer more light on her right arm, but it's quite nice.

January 19, 2004

The way you draped and lit the backdrop suits me. The shot looks overexposed. There is no detail at all in the whites, and the lighting on her face is too much. But is that the shot, or is it the scan?

December 8, 2003

Nice work. I do find my eye drawn to the street light, though. It breaks up the pattern. Have you considered editing it away?

December 8, 2003

Well the verticals worked better here. I can't figure out why, but this one doesn't hold my attention nearly as well as that other composition. It's still a beautiful work.

December 8, 2003

It's such a beautiful shot it's a real shame the verticals aren't.

December 8, 2003

I like it better cropped tighter on the left.

December 8, 2003

The bluriness on the photo's right side bothers me a bit, but I like this.

December 8, 2003

It would be better without the hotspot below center on the right.

December 8, 2003

I like how you handled the background, and the lighting on the hair. I'm less fond of the lighting on the face. There's no highlight in her right eye, for one thing. Covering the left half or right half of her face make it look like two very different portraits to me. Perhaps that's what you were after. I have to admit that, while the lighting seems technically flawed, the effect interests me.