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Comments welcome .

beautiful photo

Nicely done, William. You got the white balance just right which brings out the colors in her skin beautifully. Terrific image. David

William,

 

She is a very pretty girl. You have focused very well on her eyes. Her skin tones and the color saturation is excellent. She has good catch lights and her eye contact is very good with the camera (viewer). The hair light is very good. It really brings out the highlights in her hair. The background is nicely neutral and she is well separated from it. Your left and right compositional balance is very good. She has applied her make-up very well. Her lips do look a little dry. I would like to see more of a shine on her lips. Fresh lipstick or lipgloss should help (or she could just lick her lips).

 

She is turned slightly at an angle to the camera, but not enough. This is not a very feminine pose. Showing your subject’s widest areas (shoulder to shoulder or hip to hip) makes those areas appear wide. Your subject will appear thinner, more feminine and more graceful if turned at more of an angle to the camera. The lines you see from an angle have more apparent motion, interest and grace. It usually looks best to angle your subject somewhere around 45 degrees.

 

I would move in closer to her and give her less head room. It is best to keep her arms from showing at the bottom if possible. You don't want the viewer's eyes to keep going to her arms at the bottom of your photograph.

 

You have your main light coming from her side. This casts shadows from her nose and lips to the side of her face. It also puts the catch lights on the side of her pupils (the catch lights should be on her irises). The catch lights are on her pupils because her pupils are quite dilated. If you use brighter modeling lights or have a brighter area to shoot her in her eyes will not become so dilated. The ideal position for a catch light is at the 10 or 2 o'clock position. To achieve this your main light should be above, in front and to the side of your subject. Judicious use of shadows can produce a very nice illusion of depth within your photograph and make it much more interesting.

 

You should really have her pull her smock down to eliminate wrinkles under her breasts. Her smile does look a little forced. Try to have her relax.

 

Nice shot,

 

Mark

Thanks for your comments . Bill

Hello Bill,

 

I think it's very nice portrait with nice expression. Lights work good, may be try to eliminate shadows. I like this shot.

I will advise you for more closer crop for the face. What you will gain:

1) Hands will be not seen. They get attention from the face, because of the contast and are cut.

2) Your model will be thinner with less body presence.

You see, that you have a lot of white and only some presence of hands and face.

Better to show only the face. Use the rule of thirds - it will work well here.

 

Good luck to you, Iavor

Iavor ,Thanks for the comment , I agree with you . I'm aware of the " Golden Mean " , but in this case she wanted to show what she wears in the College Salon . Regards Bill