modeling/fashion work Untitled

Welcome comments and suggestions, thank you.

I don't think you can make two people look more unnatural than you have here, I have alot more photos to look at but this one is number one at this time. I don't understand the concept for a photo like this, they sell mannequins for this effect. Don't get mad at me for this remark, I was the one who had to tell you, and I'm doing it because I want to see you become a fine photographer. Regards

By no means do I want to wrub it in but John is absolutely right. Also your lighting is far from perfect. Sorry about that, but I wrote it for the same reason. Would also like to see another go at it. With kind regards, Ton.