HiBye!

This is my first attempt on advertising. How is it ? Thanks for

critiques and for your time .

Well I actualy like the image. Would it make me buy the cookie? No. I like the still life side of this and the colours,but I think if the idea is to sell a product it has to be more enhanced, for example: the filing would have to be easier to see and look more uniform. But I am not some marketing editor, just a possible "consumer".

Mohsen, I rate this photo low, because I have seen all your images and I follow them! this one is full of errors! (of course from my view) what's my mean: your camera and view isn't horizontal, cup of tea is out of focus (but I think whole image and elements are), lighting is poor (in confirm with your other photos), and composition also is poor, all in one, I can't accept this is yours ;) Regards

Clean work

Khalaghiat tet tooop ...

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Zadi to kare tabligh

rastesho begoo cheghadr pool vagereftiii!!!?

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bedooneh ghoori ham emtehna kardi

ye meghdar ezafeh miad

engar khodesho bezoor ( ba reshveh ) ja kardeh to aks

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Perhaps mohammad is right. In fact I didn't know how to arrange this much objects in the photo. Of course composing an image is hard work and needs years of experience and knowledge.

 

Also I confess that I've done a lot of PS-Work on it to remove light from glossy parts.

 

Also I agree with mario on advertising part.

 

Thanks to Ali for his comment.

 

Thank you all for your guidance.

I like it the way it is. Very nice colors too, the only critique; i cant read very well the Hibye ,could maybe a little bit more horizontal.

I have tried things like this, but it didnt came out as nice as your photo!

This image is pretty to look at but remember, prettiness does not sell a product, the message does. I think the cookies and the Hibye package is lost in this composition and colors. You don't really need the pot here, maybe the cup. At first glance, besides the bright yellow in the foreground, the pot grabs my attention and has become kind of a primary focus.

 

I would have probably started with the package more in the foreground and maybe on the left in a more diagonal, stretching towards the center with the cookies to it's right, or maybe one or two in front. The writing on the package has to be very clear.

 

The cup, if you wanted to include would go somewhere more in the background. It's not that easy. Many shoots are taken for this kind of work and the most effective one is chosen. I know you can do better.

best wishes.

Excellent work Mohsen . The details , light and colors are All Perfect

Salam Mohsen

man kheili ro still life va studio vared nistam va faghat nazaram ro migam

benazare man rage zaminash ba abie ghoori va livan mikhore (dar kol ranghat kheili khoobe)hamintor noor.vali oon ghoorie inja ezafe ast(engar livanaro zade kenar.behtar bood ke jaye ghoori, livan ro bedoone oon hibye too nalbekish mizashti,oon vaght ye kam bayad zoom ro miovordi jolo tar.

mamnoon az inke be man ham sar mizanio nazar midi.

I like the color setting, great job.

Thank you Ellen, Cyrus, Alon, Ali and Ray for your time and comments.

Ummmmmmmmmmmmm.. excelente aperitivo,, perfecta luz, color y composicion, un cordial saludo Nafar.

نور پردازی بسیار دقیق انجام شده ، چیدمان رو در سطح فریم میپسندم بدین معنی که وزن موضوع در سطح فریم پخش و نقطه ثقل روی قوری قرار گرفته شده، کنتراست رنگ قهوه ای تیره و قرمز روشن و سفید روی پوسته شکلات با زمینه و ترام زمینه گرمای تصویر رو مطلوب کرده. تنها ایرادی که میتونم از این تصویر بگیرم سایه در قوری روی لبه اون هست و سایه دسته فنجان که روی لبه نعلبکی شکسته شده. کمی دقت بیشتر میتونه یه کار بی نقص رو تحویل بده.

موفق باشی

Great use of colors.

Thanks everyone specially Majid for his long comment.

 

I myself like the colors too. However I know that it doesn't work as an advertisement.