joslyn Joslyn_16

An attractive and relaxed model with nice make-up.  The fuzzy cameo effect sort of works for me in the bottom half but the upper half, not so much.  The effect seems to bleed into her hair.  The hair light is at least a stop too bright.  The main light is low and accents her neck and chin however, since the overall light on her face is flat, you could add facial dimension by gently dodging the bridge of her nose and lightly burning in the chin and neck.  There is a lot of artifact on the background on the right side that should be removed.

Although I agree with the previous comment that improvements could be made ( can't they always ) ! I think it is a beautiful rendition of Joslyn , I like the treatment and presentation and I'm sure she will be pleased with the result . The inclination of her head and fearless camera contact shows her confidence and trust in you . She makes a lovely model and I look forward to seeing more shots of her . Bill

Best regards Raymond!

PDE

very nice portrait