Flight

I spotted this girl looking through the fence while I was waiting for

my plane.

Any comment and/or suggestion for improvement would be most appreciated.

 The wire fence braking her view makes her fragility tragic in the very essence of  it.

Great work!

This is one of your very best( no news here;-))....it is strong, geat timing, the writing connect to her locality, the fence ' cutting" her sight which depict childhood curiosity , Her hands form looks  uncertainity,  and her T shirt looks happier than her look, but complements very nicely the FG vegetation.A masterful work in my book!

You have it pretty much in the groove.  There is nothing here definitely that needs to change, but a bit of experimenting may be in order.

If I were to experiment with enhancing the image, I would try to bring a little more attention to her face with a vignette around her, but leaving the sign alone.  I would see if darkening the outside to bring more attention to her face would be in order.  I would then dodge the highlights on her face just a bit to see if it enhances impact.

Very moving - Reminds me of the cinema - 'the boy in the striped pajama'. And I find the original version more sensitive than the experimetnal one. It is probably so because I would not want my attention totally on her face but on her posture and context also that are as much important in the narrative. The wire passing just over her one eye is cooly dramatic. Yet the way she puts her right hand on her shoulder near the hair implies a developing feminine grace in her personality. The picture reveals her context, co-existing moods and dreams - all together. Best regards.

An impressive and interesting photograph. Somehow story-telling and documentary, but still artistic street. I like the B&W tonality, very nice contrast and high quality level.

Tatjana,

I am so glad to know that the image manages to convey to you some of the same emotions the scene originally brought to me. Thanks.

Pnina,

Thanks, The posture seemed tentative but the gaze was direct and unwavering.

The framing was very good luck. These children moved about the perimeter peeking through the fence for most of the time while I waited at the airstrip, so I had a few good opportunities.

Steve,

 Thanks for taking the time to work up an alternate version and for explaining the motivations for your adjustments. This sort of exchange is always wonderful as it gets us  thinking about what choices we make and why.  While I understand and agree with your suggestions in theory, in practice they feel a bit imposed and thus work against my intent here additionally the vignette muddies up the tonality of the foreground. I often employ vignetting and masked adjustment layers to highlight specific aspects of an image. In this instance I wanted a straightforward look so I concentrated on trying to achieve a rendition which felt as natural as possible.

Jayanti,

I know the film image from the movie which you allude to. While it had not occurred to me until you mention it, I do understand the connection and similarity, thanks for pointing that out. I appreciate you sharing your impressions, they concur in many regards with my own.

Gunnar,

Thanks for you comment. In particular I was glad to read your assessment of the tonality. I did spend a bit of time trying to get a maximum of information into the tones without  straying too far from the scene as it was captured.

A very striking & poignant photo, Gordon -- Tatjana nailed it with her comments indeed... I initially had been deliberating whether a more severe crop (possibly square & framed partially on the letters of 'Indonesia') might bring more immediate focus on her expression and the fragility of her situation perhaps, but then one would lose a major part of the narrative -- notably the airport setting, I guess... 

The little girl behind the barbed wire - it looks a bit tragic!

well done in many ways.  i love it.  best, jamie

The second is even more sever, for me it  brings  the connotation of my people history in the II WW...( of course it is different .)