Caution

The original was too 'loud' . . . . too much red and blue in the

shorts and jersey.

I guess the yellow card meant you got into some trouble on the field right? This is ok but nothing jumps at you and says here is why you should care! Look at this picture in 3 months and ask yourself why you did it.

I know exactly why I did it.

 

1) Camera Club assignment on still life - altered category (honorable mention)

 

2) This commemorates my participation in the sport that I learned in 1959 and enjoyed for the next forty years as a player, coach and referee.

 

Why do you take your pictures?

 

If the 2/3 rate is yours - and even if it isn't - do you know anything about the aesthetics of composition? Do you know what trompe l'oeil is?

 

Oh, never mind.

this composition won't have impact to some since it is not only an obviously arranged one but especially because is "just so" arranged. "just so" composed and lit photos, even when they are of exotic subject matter in nature or landscapes simply leave some viewers (though not camera club judges that do them!) feeling flat about them.

 

that said, I do like the idea, and the spot color object style is quite appropriate. the only thing that truly bothers me is the quality of the b+w conversion. sure, there are the obligatory whites and blacks (another "just so" attribute) but a lot of detail that viewers should be curious about gets lost in all that contrast. soccer may not be baseball but there is richness of nuance and detail in both sports.

Well, first I doubt that most camera club judges do this sort of thing. What I did learn from the assignment is how hard it is to create a set up that doesn't look "just so". Try it yourself sometime.

 

I don't understand your comment about details lost in the contrast due to B&W conversion. Everything is readable, although I understand that you may not relate to the significance of all the elements if you're more interested in hitting behind the runner than creating passing angles.

my "just so" comment re c-c judges had more to do with their "carefully taught" propensities for wanting to see things done "just so" than with subject genre per se.

 

as for the b+w conversion, much is variable depending on the color filtration utilized or the channel mixture done. specifically here, the whistle at the end of the lanyard is lost on the background, as are dark parts of the shoe. and that pin, if it is significant then why not place it more forward and moving in closer to it with a wider angle lens? the perspective here is nearly flat looking down despite the "just so" diagonal arrangement.

I remain convinced that my monitor is brighter than yours. I have no trouble picking out the black whistle.

 

I agree that the central location of the pin is unfortunate. It commemorates a state coaches' workshop I attended and is easily readable in the 11X14 print, and probably smaller had I gone that route.

 

I tried this at different angles, but it doesn't work since you start to reveal the slate patio above the jersey. Not good. The coaches award also looks better as a rectangle than as a trapezoid.

my monitor is gamma 2.2 with no feedback that my images are too bright. and I see the yellow card here as orange-yellow. is what I see correct?

Well let's talk about color.

 

The card is yellow. My camera captured yellow, my monitor shows yellow, but my printer renders it as yellow orange, which is what you're seeing.

 

Which suggests . . .

 

(just to make it interesting, I'm on a Mac.)

(unless you're telling me that this is a scan of a print...) your printer is a key clue IF it is correctly calibrated and accurately rendering similar to what I see, meaning that it is faithfully translating what your off-calibrated Mac (whose gamma should be 1.8) is inaccurately rendering to your eye. I can assuredly say this since my large prints are commercially done off CDs and the colors/tones/luma are tolerantly faithful to how my files appear on my monitor.

 

a good source for remedial assistance is this link:

 

http://www.normankoren.com/makingfineprints1A.html

 

hope this helps.

 

I like this, but the yellow card is too central. I think it would look better if placed in a corner. Nice idea.