Goth girl with a river of hair

Submitting this photo for critic mostly for comments on how to

improve this photo. I personally love the hair, but I'm pretty

biased towards long hair. Anyway...

 

Let me know what everyone thinks. Thanks.

Top of frame is too crowded, makes her look trapped.

Goth girl on the steps of a crypt. Hmmmmmm, I think the idea is good, but the photo needs improvement. IMHO the exposure is off. The marble of the crypt is without much detail. At the same time, the hair is so dark that the central portion blacks out and details are lost. This angle on the model does not do her justice. She has very dramatic facial lines, but the twisted posture confuses the eye. I would suggest that you either go for a portrait, or go for a pose as a cadaver. Either can make better use of the Goth, ghoul, and crypt, message.

These are the kind of comments I'm looking for... thank you very much. I know there is something I can do next time to improve this... there is something there somewhere. To me, this one is kinda stale, and really want to get input.

 

Anyone else got helpful comments?

She is too close to the top of the frame, it feels confined and claustrophobic. It's hard shooting dark hair and marble together whilst getting detail in both, and it appears some has been lost. Maybe try a darker background?

I don't see the balance in this shot.

 

i like that you have noticed and tried to capture the models beautiful hair but the dark door and dark clothing seems to be competing too heavily with the central theme of the shot.

 

 

Mike Sea