Prospective

Good combination of colors, and field depth.

A greeting, Maria

An excellent match of lines, Maria!! Great job, I love it!!

I am grateful, my friends.

nice colors

Maria,

This is an interesting shot with a lot of possibilities, but it misses the mark in several ways. The colors are compelling, no question about that. The repetition of the blues and yellows to the exclusion of any other color, and the backup blue of the ocean and sky really grabs the eye. I think you saw this whole riot of color and lines and KNEW there had to be really wonderful potential here. Good eye.

But there is actually too much going on and the competiton of multiple "subjects" ultimately is a problem. Is the image about persepctive?, color?, repetition?, where does the eye finally settle? I think you just tried to do too much. And that makes a shot with good potential just average. By trying to get everything into the shot, the foreground is left empty.

This happens all the time in photography. We've just got to get every interesting element into the frame.

Shot down the middle of the passageway, there are certainly converging lines, but they are not that compelling. Again, the color theme is so intense as to be a confusing, competing second subject.

I don't know the focal length used, and you may be limited by the equipment. But I would move to the right at the widest angle you have and get lower and much closer to the near chairs, filling the frame as much as possible to avoid the empty forground. Shoot down the line of chairs to capture the receding line of the chairs, tables and blue rail with the doors to the left receding asymmetrically.

The opportunity for the surprising color combinations is still there, and the perspective is much more compelling.

It's almost impossible to critique on this site anymore without also acknowledging and either agreeing with or refuting the ratings or "social comments" left by others. I have little interest in the congratulations kind of comments that are so common here. We learn absolutely nothing by being told our work is a masterpiece. Nothing on this site is a masterpiece. So I hope you understand when I say this image does not begin to approach the superlative ratings it has gotten. But there is every reason to strive for such a goal with every image.

VL

Venicia you said: "I have little interest in the congratulations kind of comments that are so common here. We learn absolutely nothing by being told our work is a masterpiece."

 

Absolutely not true in my opinion. Telling us WHY an image works is just as important as why it does not. Sure, I agree "great shot" has less value in helping us improve. But those comments can also tell us if an image is liked over-all... sometimes that too has value.

 

In this case I also like the rich yellows and blues. As well as the varying degree of blue from the table, to the posts, the sea and then the sky. Aside from the colors I think this is a nice capture but could be made even better if it were at a liitle more of an angle. Unfortunately the only way to do that would be if you were about five feet off the deck. And nobody can do that and live to tell about it. Just my opinion here. Thanks for sharing yours as well. Nice capture!

I think Venicia was trying to reduce the amount of empty floor space on the left third. I do see an important foreground element in the near table, and I don't see where the only way to make that more prominent and also reduce the floor space is to dive off the deck. You simply move right, or better, get as close to the table as hyperfocal distance will allow.

 

Being a fan of rhythm shots, I actually enjoy multiple patterns. However, anything that breaks the pattern becomes a focal point, for better or worse. The distant yellow door is one and perhaps a person at that position would make for a more compelling subject.

 

But what about the broom handle, or whatever it is? Once you find it, it becomes a distraction that can't be ignored. If possible, I would have moved it.

Carl, even if you moved the broom the railing stops there so the pattern is still broken no matter what. moving past that part and shooting from that point would end that problem. I have to admit I agree with lessening the empty space on the left.

 

I would like to know more on your reasoning to move right and shoot down the line of chairs because I would have thought to go left and shoot down the line from a lower perspective.

 

Knicki

Well, if the outside rails are also blue, moving up about five feet and out the same distance would give a really interesting composition, keep the colors and lose the ceiling at the same time. However since that seems impossible in this situation, I would agree with Knicki and move slightly left and perhaps down as well. Or up closer and over to the right could still work here Carl. Or, perhaps turning completely to the right and catching some nice seagull activity or whatever else is out there might be the answer. Just kidding....

 

Maria, it takes a good eye to see the potential of something like this. well seen then! Aloha.

I would not only remove the distractive broom as Carl suggested, but also the chairs, and the tables, ...

but then the problem is that the parasols will become a new distraction... So I will suggest humbly to remove them too, with the handrail as well....

Better isn't it?!... but could be improved still ... because without parasols and handrail (and chairs/tables/broom that we removed before... you remember?), the ceiling will appear as a too single, too large, too dark volume, so I would suggest to take off the roof too... as the consequence the floor might just look unbalanced without the ceiling ...

after the dismantle of the floor, don't you think that the cabins appear ridiculous..... so...

what is left then: a blue sky and a blue sea with an horizon line... separating the image in 2 exactly equal parts.... isn't that a major problem too......?!..........

end of the demonstration!... beginning of the laugh ....

<:o)))

just jokin' Maria ... I had a hard day today!!

I like the simplest solution of moving forward. No broom, no break in the railing, floor space now has rhythmic shadows, and the distant protruding deck area becomes larger unless you use a wider angle to include the beach.

Maria, una foto molto interessante per i colori la luce e le linee...La scopa stona un p�.

Dei due scatti a me questo e' quello che piace di piu'. Lo spazio a sinistra da respiro secondo me e accentua anche il motivo ripetivo dei tavoli. La scopa e' un dettaglio di minor importanza. Ancora una volta grande occhio!

I can't see why this is on the top photos list!

anyway nice colors and straight horizon, but otherwise clumsy composition..

Very nice!