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Personally I rather like this.

If you are really looking for critique, perhaps the head is at a very slight angle and the lighting to the right is slightly darker. Skinwork is nice and natural. For me personally, this sort of slight tilt works when less of the neckline can be seen or when backed up a little.

Why am I saying this, well, I used to shoot like you have, however, my commercial clients now seem to want that Peter Hurley look of very bright all over headshots that are very tightly cropped.