Self Portrait and statement on aging I actually submitted this to a juried show, and it got accepted. It didn't place, but It is my first image in a "Professional Show"!! The show submission included

First off, i suggest recropping. the presence of your glasses in the upper right corner distract from the image.

The concept you have is a good one, but I don't really see it in this image. The people inside are very small, almost so small that its dificult to tell how old they are and your own face has very little detail to it.

I think if you wanted to try reshooting it, you might want to consider a tripod (this would eliminate the lunge that you had to do to frame this image and allow you to reframe the shot at a better angle so the people inside appear larger), and shoot in different light (a sunny day should give you stronger reflections)

Good luck