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James,

Caitlin is a very pretty girl. You have focused well and she has a beautiful smile. Her skin tone is very good. The contrast is very nice.

Move in closer to her (or crop) so there isn't so much room on the sides and top.

You definitely want to straighten your image. Make the vertical lines vertical and the horizontal lines horizontal. The building is crooked.

It's a fun pose. It looks like you caught her in the middle of getting up or getting down from sitting on the edge of the building. I don't think this would work for a senior portrait, but it's a cute shot.

You really don't want the tops of her hands pointing towards the camera or her legs skewed. They look quite awkward.

I assume you used film, seeing as how there is grain in the image. It doesn't at all look bad, but I do see some dust spots and it appears you have a vertical scratch bisecting her left lower leg. If this is digital than something very strange is going on in your image.

I would try to get some light on her eyes. I would also smooth out the dark circles under her eyes.

Nice shot,

Mark

Great model and so well lit, very pleasant expression on this pretty face, wishing you all of the best.

I quite like this just the way it is... Well Made Indeed! The tilt makes the building seem as if it is decomposing right before our eyes and the model... Charming!
-r-

Interesting photo.  The relaxation of the upper body and brilliant smile is contradicted by the tension of the lower body...which creates a sense of dissonance in the subject of the photo.  The skewed internal frame supports this, while the harmonious tones work against it.  It is like a minor study by Erik Satie, with wry and intelligent playing against what you might call the folk motif of the graduate photo.  If you did all this on purpose, and it sounds like you are certainly conscious enough to have done so.

The tones are luxurious indeed.

If I were to recommend anything, it would be to present this as part of a series wherein the development of the model's pose and gesture constitutes the theme and variation of the motif.  It is musical, and very modern music at that.  If you don't mind the analogy.

Not incidentally, the physical and emotional skews here break through the imprisoning picture plane and project the subject into the viewer's space as a very real person, not just an icon or feminine rorshach on which to project the viewer's fantasies or speculation.

 I really like it.