jerrymat 5 Posted May 9, 2009 The first thing I noticed is that you have used a rather unconventional cropping ratio, usually reserved for scenic panoramas. Since every picture tells a story I always look for the compositional elements and what story they might be stating. Here you have two different pictures telling two different stories, separated by a vertical post. Try holding up a piece of paper to crop the images on your computer screen; put the paper exactly on the vertical corner of the support post. Two different pictures, glued together. Why not make them two? Regards, Jerry Link to comment
wookiee 0 Posted May 11, 2009 Thanks for the comments Jerry What you say makes sense. The original picture had the horizon directly in the center which I didn’t think about when I took the shot. By correcting this I've probably made the composition worse. Regards Shane Link to comment
William Michael 2,286 Posted June 6, 2010 I think that the horizon penetrating the Female Subject's head, is also a problem for you.An higher camera angle would have alleviated this - not much more camera height was required maybe only 12 inches I am not keen on the crop at her ankles, either.I do like to control of the exposure (and the PP) to get a large range of tone all with good definition and also the water's colour and tone range. Was it somewhere on the eastern seaboard - top areas of NSW or southern Qld???WW Link to comment
wookiee 0 Posted June 8, 2010 Hi WilliamThe horizon has bugged me since I first viewed the image on screen.To be honest with myself I didnt put enough thought into the composition in the first place. I snapped away as quick as possible so we could get my then 9 month old daughter out of the 40 deg C heat.The sun was high in the sky so made use of a polariser which brought back some saturation in the sea and sky, some post processing in Lightroom was required as well.This shot was taken under Busselton Jetty about 230kms from Perth on the West coast of Australia.Thanks for the commentsCheersShane Link to comment
William Michael 2,286 Posted June 17, 2010 I never guessed WA - though I should have - the water is crystal clear.CU round . . . I would like to know how the band gig turned out for you.WW Link to comment
bretsch 0 Posted September 17, 2010 First of all, let me congratulate you for trying something out of the ordinary with this portrait.....I think it is a very commendable effort.However, as has been stated already, there are a couple of things you may try different next time.But before I start, let me tell you that I'm not bothered at all with the vertical post, the fact that the eyes of your model is looking at that other part of the frame, serve as a bridge to join both halves.As for the horizon, I agree with previous comments, you could either lower it, or higher it, it is another compositional tool, that you need to take into account, just as you did with the peer posts. A slight adjustment lo light curves and color, may also serve you to make those blue hues to pop out....something like this, perhaps. (Increased warmth, saturation, and work light curves)You have a very keen eye, and peculiar way of composing...keep it up you're on to something here. Link to comment
ron_baker6 0 Posted December 3, 2010 Hi Shane, since you are not ready for classes at this point, continue on reading books on photography that way it will prepare your mind. Good photographers know that pictures are made in the mind before they even click on the shutter. The camera is the tool to paint that picture. I was looking at your SUNSET. Why are sunsets so alluring even though it happens everyday. People flock to the beach to get the sunset shot. Do a google search on claude lorraine, J M Turner and John Constable foremost landscape painters. search on JM Turner "crossing the brook" See the Framing where it leads the eye. That was in your SUNSET! Sunset needs a little work in photoshop but your idea was good.A good book is the "Photographers eye composition and design by Michael Freeman.Good Luck! Link to comment
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