rascal64 9 Posted November 25, 2008 Thank you for stopping. Comments and critiques are appreciated. Link to comment
MichaelChang 12 Posted November 26, 2008 What a doll, and growing up fast too. :-) The exposure and colors are great. Maybe the background can be treated in a way that makes it appear more distant. (Or maybe it is already so, but knowing it isn't a distant background influences my perception) Link to comment
rascal64 9 Posted November 26, 2008 Thank you Michael...ahhhh the trickery of aperture. You really can't tell...can you? Actually I was going to weave some stars in the bg..but then I thought....nah...I'll keep it simple for a change.I wanted to see if the more simple portraits get any attention anymore. I hope that you can make a stop to the latest "no words" that I started. I've got some real "cringers" stored on my C drive...eeeeeeek!!!!! Link to comment
steve_lowther 0 Posted November 26, 2008 Lovely portrait, with many complimentary elements to it. You have used short light as evidenced by the shadow side of the face towards the camera, and a diagonal composition with keeps the eye moving and investigating. However, you have lost the key with the bright background. To keep the image low key, you should have the background darker than her skin so the eye goes to the minority tone as the dominant element. As it is, the eye is pulled to the background with little to investigate, setting up a false dominance since her face really is the most important part of the image. I also rotated the crop a bit to strengthen the diagonal composition. The shadows in the foreground are a bit deep, not encouraging eye movement, so I dodged them out a bit and added color saturation as dodging sometimes desaturates as well. I dodged the scleras (the whites of the eye) and the catch lights of the eye for extra "pop". I also added an edge treatment. If you don't find my suggestions helpful, then please send me an email and I will be happy to delete them for you. Buy if you have any questions, don't hesitate to email me, either. Link to comment
MichaelChang 12 Posted November 26, 2008 Steve, that's quite a critique with example. I'm learning too. Maybe I should start following you around (for your other contributions). Link to comment
Pierre Dumas 419 Posted November 27, 2008 But I think I've already commented the same one! Maybe some other version very similar to this one! Whatever, it's very nice and expressive portrait! PDE Link to comment
rascal64 9 Posted November 27, 2008 Thank you! Pierre..you may have commented on the same child...but not the same pic. She's my contract model (until she's 18). Steve...I appreciate the detailed feedback. It sounds great in theory...but maybe because of thesmall file size?....You made her look scarier than her Halloween pix! Although I do agree with the tilt and the frame. I actually already dodged her eyes a bit. Unless I am doing an illustrative finish...I don't like eyes that "pop". I do appreciate the attention though and thank you Dimi for your visit as well. Link to comment
sideris 0 Posted November 30, 2008 Dreamy gaze, almost ethereal, a delicious portrait done with mastery and love, no doubts. Indeed isn't easy to achieve a good result on a classic subject photo -especially when the subject belongs to our beloved inner circle because love enlighten everything, then we see the subject with an unique gaze painted by the close love relationship- I think it is so much difficult than a capture done on an exotic subject, or weird, or unseen before. But you did it. My sincere congratulations. Link to comment
teresa.zafon 0 Posted December 1, 2008 Beautiful portrait, Tiffany. Gorgeous light and you have a great model. Link to comment
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