love the pants

suitable as a fashion shot?

She looks afraid. I'm not clear not how one would incorporate this into a commercial endevor.

the look on her face was to suggest that she was hiding between the cylinders

To better give the feeling of hiding, we probably need to see more of the environment, either with a wider angle or by moving back. There would be a bit more drama and implied depth if her left hand wasn't obscured. Also, the vertical lines are close enough to vertical that they probably should be.

But the pants are quite nice.