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A truly beautiful picture of a no doubt priceless memory. There's such innocence in their concentration.

I just love it. Super fresh and candid. The girl is a bit too white, some burning needed.

My favorite of all folders. Honest photograph. Would not change. One for memory book.

...Norman Rockwell... I'm not sure it fits the NR genre, as I think there's always a bit of humor, but with that humor a little sinicism... and there's none of that here (lack of sinicism is a good thing for this shot IMHO). The sepia definitely puts it in that era of art though. As for what you could have done differently... The expression that you do see is priceless... the one you don't see is too unfortunate. It would have been a really amazing overall photo if you could see both kids eyes. As it is, the child, whose eyes you can see, has a truely amazed or maybe concentrated look. I might also like the image ballanced a little better. The big dark area works really well to contrast agains the one childs face, and the other is a bit too low contrast to notice. Maybe if you'd had a similar space below the right child? If you stair at the image and blur your eyes, you can see the major breakup of darks and lights. The left side has quite a bit of Darks to play off the lights, whereas the right side has almost none. I'd love to see this one shot again, from a little higher, seeing that same expression (or similar) on BOTH faces. Of course, this is just my take on it... and I do agree that this one is a keeper. As for being nervous... I think many of us are... I know I am, when I put up work of my own ;) Nice work

I really want this picture to be symmetrical. Then we see that the children are alike in pose and in their attention to the clouds; and as we look longer, we notice how they are different, and start to wonder about how their personalities are different, and how the same. As it is, they are different because I can't see one of them. If this were because he(?) were shy or mysterious or invisible it would be fun, but I'm not getting that: I think it was because Mom wasn't in the right place for that. I still think what you have is very good, but you did also ask about "better."

 

I like the sepia tone, but not your reason for it. (That is a reason not to explain too much, but to let your work speak for itself, even, or especially, when you are nervous). I like it because it's pretty, but also because it has a softness which is useful when you are trying to figure clouds and angels with images of earth and boys. Which you do here with remarkable success (and of course, _your_ boys are angels: we can all see that).

 

I would like to thank those who have critiqued this far. (one is my son, one is my daughter... I thought I would clarify that since she reads these critiques with me...she has a very passionate love for photography and a great desire to learn). But thank you to everyone who are contributing to the betterment of my work.

This is very good image, grasping for great. I wish I could see both expressiosn. The child on the left has such a thoughtful expression that I want to see the other. The overalls might need a little burning in near the top of the frame as the extreme highlight is a little to much next to the very dark grass. The crop on the head of the child on the right is a little too drastic cut off the way it is.

The sepia s lovely here, giving this an old-fashioned feel, its just too bad the girl is out of focus and slightly overexposed or "hot" otherwise it would be a fine picture. I would also have not cropped it so tightly.

i like most how u composed the pic... it gives great sense of freedom.

 

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I think the sepia tone really works here. There's a lot of potential with this shot. I agree with the others that seeing both faces would be a significant improvement.

 

I think if you had positioned yourself to the side of the kids instead of down by your son's feet, it would have been easier to get both faces. With their hands under their heads, that tilts the face. Since they're facing opposite directions, their faces are tilted in opposite directions. So, if you shoot from the feet end of either child, you'll always get the top of someone's head because his/her face is tilted away from the camera.

 

If, however, you shoot from the side, both faces will be tilted to the sides, and no one's face will be tilted away from the camera. You would also be able to stand closer to their heads and get closer to a direct overhead angle. That would also improve the framing of both faces. You could always rotate the resulting image if you prefer the side-by-side pose.

I hope I don't sound defensive by posting this but I thought I may want to explain something about this shot....if i would have moved to the side i would have distracted them and never have gotten the expression...they see the camera and it is "strike a pose". But thank you to EVERYONE that has commented so far.

I know what your talking about Jenny my 5 year old has the same "strike pose" affliction geuss it comes from been stalked constantly by her camera nut father.

 

I don't think I been this nervouse since I posted my first shot on photo.net, does anyone else feel like they are putting a lot more thought in before commenting? This is a good thing.

 

Love the sepia, this shot would look great in a rustic frame and a nice mat.

 

Cheers

 

Mark

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