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Cute model, but harshly lit. Watch out for the blocky shadows on the wall behind the model and under her chin. Her skin tones seem overly contrasty, and there's very little visible detail in her outfit. It's possible that some heavy PP could salvage this shot, but I would say a diffuser on your flash would have helped things initially. Also, consider your depth of field. The flowers in the background are blurred, but to me it's not enough to stop them distracting from the subject of the shot.

Don't be discouraged though, there's potential here. Keep trying!

Thank you very much Chris for your comment and your time!

I agree with you. Infact I used the camera mounted flash and I can't control it.

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