Portrait

This photo was taken years. I love the lighting on the background.

The dark side of the face could use a little fill though.

 

Any comments?

I like the pose and expression but agree with you that more fill light needs to be directed to the face. My attention goes to her lit-up nose instead of her eyes.

you have 2 competing elements here; the girl and "Minneosota". My eye is confused here and I am unsure what you are portraying here

Her expression and pose is nice. The lighting is too harsh on her forehead though, and I would crop above the jeans as they are just a splash of light at the corner of the frame - and they are sloppy looking. I agree that the bright "Minnesota" draws your eye as well - though this was probably what she wanted in some respects.

good expression and pose, but model is not illuminated enough.

The lighting is not terribly flattering to your subject. The light looks to be almost over her head. There are no catch lights in her eyes. You could try having the light over your head to the left of the camera. As well she looks to be standing next to the backdrop. Hopefully your set-up allows her to stand six to eight feet infront of the backdrop.

The image seems a little too grey for my taste. The model seems imcomfortable and the smile very forced.

This was totally existing lighting. The light was a single bulb coming through a grate in the ceiling of the elevator. I wish I had some fill when I took it. Just even a small card would have filled in the back side of her face. Oh Well, live and learn

 

Steve

This is good, but the lettering on the shirt really has to go unless you have good reason for keeping it. As it opened the top looked like a glamour poartrait from the 50's, but the logo is too big and inelegant and overpowering IMO.

This image possesses a superficial charm which evaporates when you become aware of the girl's uneasy smile, the unflattering overhead lighting(the highlights on the forehead and nose) and the logo competing for attention.

Steve, I agree with the comments about the lighting & lettering. I might also be tempted to crop the lower portion...but I'm not sure - have to look at it some more.

 

As for the smile & pose, I find it sweet...there's a hint of mid-western charm. It may not win any awards, but I bet many years down the road, she'll be awfully glad you took it.