Connie

Just looking for suggestions on what could make this a better

picture.

I'd say it's a bit light. There are good whites, but not really any blacks. This is easily corrected in Photoshop.

Leaving aside such obvious questions as what is a pretty teenager doing sitting by the side of a country road without any pants on?, I would suggest that turning her about 90 degrees left so that the sunlight was coming from the side instead of from the back would be an improvement. Next, assuming that this woman is where she is, in the condition she is, voluntarily, she should be smiling. As is, she appears to be in the process of being abandoned after a rough date. She looks angry and resentful.

Hi, Dave. I'd include some of the road in the shot.

I think the color version gives more of a feel of a shoe ad or something. Just a thought.

The more I look at it, the more I think it's *too* soft. Now this could be a result of the blacks being a little thin. I had to lighten them up a bit after softening the picture, unfortunalty I may have gone too far. Thanks Joey for pointing that out.

Michelle, There are a couple of other shots I did with this, uhmm, outfit, I'll get them uploaded for comparison. Ya, the location is kind of odd, but we were looking for a fairly secluded place just outside of town, a gravel road was where we ended up. We (my partner and I,) didn't want to be draging her and her boyfriend halfway across the province for this first shoot. We'll likely go to a much better location for the next shoot. We just wanted to stay close to her home as more of a comfort/convinence thing for her on our first shoot together.

Heh, I don't know that she was all that resentful at the time. Hungry, yes, it was near the end of a 3.5 hour shoot, but she was in a good mood non the less. The look on her face is her natural, relaxed expression. We did get some good smiles out of her, but that's a skill I still haven't prefected yet. The 'keep them laughing' patter. I tend to get a little wrapped up in catching or setting the pose I like and then there's trying to catch all the stuff that I don't like when I look through the lens. I sometimes forget the model needs both contact and reasurance. Hell I sometimes forget that the model is even there. I get so wrapped up in the image I'm trying to make. (Yes, even when working with attractive, barely dressed models.)

 

Thanks for the critiques.

It looks a bit uncomfortable - the lack of skirt/trousers, and not making a feature of what she may be wearing... just doesn't sit quite right. Like the light on the hair though, and it is technically good.

 

 

Nice shot. Wish you had asked her to unblock the hands;). The image does look a little overexposed though