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For an advertising assignment at school. Comments very welcome.

I'm a beginner myself, so I suppose photographs which catch my eye will influence the usual populace as well...and that should be good for ad-photography.

I like the way the cloth is flying and also the pose of the model. Is the face covered to impart a sense of mystery? (I first thought the model was turned away till I noticed her feet.) I would perhaps have chosen to partly reveal the face. Also, maybe you could have softened the shot a bit...it gives a hint of romance.

Perfect! Ivana

This is sooooooo beautiful . The scene , light and colors , Perfect

simply beautiful, really well done.- Maurizio 7/7

i'll be bunging a few from this series on here, for critical commentary, as I refine my series for school. The feed back from here is really valuable as it helps me pin down those images which are "working".

I like this Anne. The station makes a perfect setting

Excellent image. Well composed and beautiful tones. Great mood also.

excellent..

I like this one best of the series. It's a very strong image. Very nice light and color palate you chose to work with here. Love the effect of the flowing fabric echoing the cloud forms. I am caught in a whirlwind of visual action. Lovely. Imparts a sense of mystery and desire. Very well done.

 

Possible improvement... I am toying with a crop--left side to exclude the building and right side to the right of the right pole. This would turn it into a vertical composition. I suppose that it would depend upon what the assignment is. If this is for fashion then the train station is less important than the model and the clothing.

 

On the others in this series I find the figure is competing a bit with the background. Here, not so much. It works. I would have tried to move the model down the platform where she would have been exposed to nearly the same light but you could silhouette her against the sky.

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

Cheers,

Bill

Thank you for your detailed commentary on my photo here. The problem I have with this series is how focused should the shot be on the actual product (shoes). In many magazines I have researched, the emphasis on the product is often much less than on the lifestyle associated with that product. I wanted this shot to encourage the thought she is part of the landscape rather than just standing in it. To me, the background is as important as the foreground. It may end up cropped, not sure at this stage.

Very good again. REgards.

Wonderful lighting and IMO perfect saturation. The fact that you placed your subject centre frame to me, loses impact. There is to much information that draws the eye to the left. Perhaps the seat could play a role if shot from a different angle. The yellow line, roof line edge and tracks all create wonderful lead in lines. Her looking away down the track indicates to me that perhaps she missed the train. I have cropped how I see this particular shot.Hope that helps

much beautiful one...

Paolo

I love this image and almost everything about it. The tonality, the subdued lighting, the pose, the windswept fabric... Quite stunning. I do feel however that many of your images are fairly centered subject wise and that it would be a great improvment if you pushed the figure off to the side and with this one, cropped it on the left to just to the right of the left most post and then flipped the image so the figure was on the right, the right side being the stronger side of an image as we read left to right... images as well as text. I've attached a crop as I've discribed... I'd like to state again though that I think this is a most beautiful and poignant image. Cheers, Raymond