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I would like some feedback about this one

thanks, wim

Wonderful shot. I like very much the composition. Regards, Teresa

Brave potrait of a child and its surrounding world...Excellent tones, composition and background.

I like the composition and texture but I'm not totally sure that the optimal contrast levels have been achieved.

Excellent synthesis and very nice sephia. Michael.

very fragile! great, regards Stefan

You mention pose, but I get the imperssion you had least control of the girl's pose compared to all the other elements in the frame. It's a very nice composition, and I wouldn't have done it differently - and I love the range of tones. Yet, given that the girl is simply standing there stiffly and not doing anything to gain my attention, I feel that something else is needed to give the picture interest. What that might be, I don't know - but if the girl herself isn't doing anything to merit my attention, then another element needs to be introduced. What I'm trying to say is that the photo has no story, no narrative: I can see that this girl is poor, but then what? How does she live, what does she do with her day, what are the important things in her life? This is what I miss. (Please don't take criticism to heart - photo-forums do tend to be gatherings of egocentrics, but ego can only get in the way - and god knows I'm as guilty as anyone).

hello philip,

 

I do understand what you mean, and appreciate your comment

It is very hard to make "the perfect shot", and I don't think this one comes close

That's why I go to madagascar again during december, and probably again in april.

I will revisit the same villages in the south, because I feel like I missed some good opportunities there, and I hope those people will be more relaxed on the second visit. It is extremely difficult to take pictures when all the children from the village gather around you, and look as if you're an alien. while taking this picture I had to move at least 50 people who don't understand the wide angle thing I was triing to explain.

In these situations it is difficult to include the things you mentioned, but I will trie harder nex time.

if you are interested you can see more pictures on www.pbase.com/wims1 ,they show the way people live .

 

Regards, wim

interesting capture, Wim- well-composed. love the textures on the wall. best, b.