42 conceptual - the other half The empty half

I think the lower half of the left half has more potential than the whole : in that area you have wall vs glass, but also fogged up glass vs view-of-the-outside (in several of the panes).

 

If you could fix all the distractions (tilt, pipes at top, black thing bottom edge) then, but only then IMO, would the whole scene hold potential.

 

Did you get any other shots PT?

I'm with Dominique on this shot.

A different perspective with some careful aligning and cropping would help.

Chuck

Conceptually this works, although I also agree with Dominique's comments. In many ways, using only the bottom left hand corner would make a stronger image, IMHO.

 

Cheers,

 

Mark

I don't think I would have tried to fit so much into the frame, PT; it would have been enough to concentrate on the lower half as already suggested, unless the halves you refer to are literally top and bottom.

Dear PT, I like your idea behind it. I thought the best way to accentuate what -- I think -- you were trying to show: the asymmetry in the partially fogged up window panes was to go monotone. I played around by correcting the perspective+cropping to get the following. What do you think?

Mandar's version is much stronger IMO, because all the "problems" seem to have gone and one is left with a clearer view of the foggy windows ...

 

I have a problem with the theme fit. But it could be me as I am not so sure what "conceptual" means in this. I imagine an empty half only inside and not very clearly. So for me no themefit.

If you meant "the empty half" as the outside of the house right in the image (as sugegsted by the crop), then I see an invisible half, but definitelly not an empty half. What is emptiness?

 

As for the image, I would go for a more simple composition.

cheers Jana

I think I can see what you intended to show PT.

 

But I find too many distracting things to "get" this image properly. I can see a possible relation between the two triangular sets of windows. But it doesn't work for me because of the tilt. Also because of the center vertical set of windows which attracts much attention. And because the lowest square window in the right triangle set is not evently lit, which gives no unity to this side. The pipes also introduce information I can't relate in any way to the rest of the pic.

 

I agree with Dominique about shooting only the lower left side.

 

Pt I think the basis are good but you should "center" of "focus" your idea.

Conceptually. (And maybe tilt less, technically)

 

Best regards.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The tilt and the extraneous stuff (pipes etc.) was also what bothered me the most, PT. Infact, the first time I looked, I was a bit lost. In addition to the things suggested, I would even go a step further and suggest zooming in/getting closer to eliminate the third set of window panes (from the middle) from both sides (if that was possible). Not with the intention of making it quite exact, but to concentrate on what you are trying to suggest, 'clear v/s foggy' half right? Sometimes, presentation could improve the theme fit as we have seen before on PT. This is very close to Mandar's version.

Thanks to all of you, it is a very tricky window, very uneven in its construction, if you look at the squars they are having different forms. I took many shots and was not happy with them, and decided to upload this one in order to get some ideas.

 

Mandar, I like your suggestion,.

 

The idea was the outside shown in the half and not in the other half, Zoom in is a good idea as well. thanks again to all of you.

PT, I hope you might post another version if you have had time ot revisit the building. I agree with the above comments, but defintely see potential in this subject.