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Theme fit fine with me but aesthetically this picture does not tell too much. The hand is brutally cut and the subject is very centered.

Exposure and light are fine though.

 

A nice idea that can be imprved.

 

Cheers,calin

Sure it qualifies, but I also think more could have been made of the comp and lighting - there's no mood in this, even a conversion to mono would inject some form of atmosphere into the moment.

However, you had the idea PT - and congrats for that.

What the others said: great theme fit, execution of pic cousl be better. Apart from the fingers that are cut off brutally indeed, PT should pay attention to the borders of his compostioin in general. The little black triangle bottom/left, the tiny strip of cloth next to it - all these things unbalance the image.

 

Just a thought of course - feel free to disagree.

 

Tom

Definitely qualifies for the theme. I agree that the crop looks a little untidy, especially along the right lower edge but, and it's a significant but, I think a key part of the image is its suggestiveness. None of the elements in the frame is complete - they're all cut off or implied, so there's some mystery to the shot. I like the use of shadow to create this effect.

 

When I look at the image, it's clear that I'm only getting part of the story; so much for the 2D instant of time in which the shot was taken; all of incompleteness drives me on to ask: 'what happened next?'

 

I don't think the technical inadequacies are any more than that. The key issue, to me at least, is that the shot works - it communicates its message, and it's fun.

I agree with Jeremy, despite the scope for improvement, this shot works for me. It conveys its message loud and clear.

 

How to improve it?

 

1) Lighting: while the orange glow suggests a warm intimate location, it's too orange for my taste. Perhaps some trials with a domestic light bulb but with correct white balance, or the rays of the afternoon sun through a gap in curtains ... The brightest part of the frame should be on the knot IMO.

 

2) Position of the hand: to avoid the cropped fingers and to show it more male, how about the hand lying flat on her body with the ribbon wrapped tight around one finger (with knot about to slip loose)?

 

3) Composition: the line of the female body is fine here, but there is a rather large expanse of skin on the left half, if it could be reduced by the hand as suggested above.

 

All in all, an idea that merits more trials.

The idea is good but the execution is too in-your-face. I am not even sure if one needs a hand here. A softer light source would be good as well.

The theme fits well, and it's obvious what your intentions are.

 

However, this is such a tight crop with very stark lighting. It's not nearly as sexy as it could be and loses much of the punch that I think you were going for.

 

Overall, good photo with room for improvement.

This does not work for me in any aspect, cheers Jana

I've read somewhere that our brain is the largest sex organ in the body and with that in mind (poor pun intended), I would have omitted the hand altogether. Seven's suggestion of a mono conversion is right on the money and I would have repositioned the light in such a fashion that a more prominent shadow of the string bikini loops would have shown up in the RH portion of this image. Don't mnd your interpretation on the theme, though.

I agree that there is room for improvment, but the theme works for me. I would be tempted too to pull that string.

The theme fit works for me but I agree with Mandar that there is no need for the hand to be present for this to work, however I like Dominique's idea of the hand being held flat on the body. Perhaps a large light box would have served better for this shot, as well.

for all the comments and advice, it's going to be fun working on an improved version! ;-) Just for the hell of it, here's a different take of the original shoot.

Theme fit is too obvious for me: the word temptation always brings that kind of image in my mind. As for the execution, it immediately reminded me of another shot I saw in the gallery: http://www.photo.net/photodb/photo?photo_id=3063653

 

Andre

The theme fit is quite obvious. I agree with many here that it would probably be more tempting for me if someone else's hand wasn't already there. As for the lighting, it has been discussed that it may be a little too warm. Although I'm ok with the colour, I think the light may also be too direct. Perhaps if it came from the top, casting shadows downwards? Cheers, Mark