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yes, i like this better, and find it appealing.

if you like this kind of portraiture, consider studying different head and shoulder poses -- shambhala M. is a photographer on this site who has posted a brilliant porfolio (in black and white) that i recommend to you.

suhayil,

i think you have overdone on the contrast. it looks a little odd to me as a portrait. however, if this is intended as an advertising image to go on a shampoo bottle, it should be fine.